Do I Still Love You?
These thoughts that swarm around my head
Loosing my breath ever time I hear your voice
Blushing every time you say my name
Do I still love you?
It has been over a year and a half
And you still feel the same about me
But you have a girlfriend
Do I still love you?
How can you be with her when you love me?
How can I tell you I love you when it wouldn't be the same?
When can I see you again?
To touch your body
To hear your voice
To see your bright smile light up your face
So many times I wish you were still with me
But I let you go
And that was my mistake
I miss you so much
I want you to hold me in your arms
Like you once did before
Do I still love you?
That question comes up to my head so many times
But the real question is
...........
Do you still love me?















Critiques
Overall, it is written well. The repetition of the most important line can have a huge effect on a poem, as it did with this one, letting the reader know what the speaker is feeling. Also, the slight change in the very last line has a large effect for the reader, making them come to a quick conclusion and revealing what it was trying to convey.
One thing that I would say to improve on future writing is to proofread or if you do already, let someone else take a look over your work because there were a few inconsequential things that could be avoided (like the use of ever instead of every).
Once again, I'll say this poem is well written and keep up the good work!
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